THE HAUNTED
Last night the leaves rattled free from the trees,As autumn slipped beneath a dying breath.It brought the scarecrow to its kneesAs the ravens mocked this fall to death.With soul-less eyes that burned...
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Hi, Jack. Just a quick note to say I'm looking at these. I tend to be a bit slow coming to conclusions - I like to read things several times and mull them over. But you're not forgotten. Chelle
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Hello Chelle, and thank you! I'm just flattered to be read. I ended up writing a new sonnet last night, but I'm still tinkering with it and not sure if I should put it on these boards in the state...
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No, Jack, you're not alone. "The Haunted" doesn't seem to wake up to itself. A lot of these images are stock & trade, & while they are apt to the theme, they don't turn up any new tricks. I...
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Thanks, Mike, I greatly appreciate your thoughts. And your eyes and ears. Definitely gives me some new possibilities. I'm flattered you took the time. I'll toy with it some more. Cheers, Jack
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Hi Jack,I like the overall tone of The Haunted and you've even got a bit of a turn on line 9! There's definitely potential there. My suggestion to you would be to heed Mike's advice about the meter...
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I like halloween types of poems, and you have some interesting images here - I get a very vivid picture of the scene. I hear a lot of anapests in this, which isn't necessarily bad, but does tend to...
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Thanks so much, Chelle and Devlin! I've been so busy over the past couple of weeks that I haven't had time to get back here. I just saw your wonderful comments and I wanted to make sure that I at...
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